For me nothing is worse than writing the query for a novel. Looking at my book and carefully picking out the most important parts. Distilling it down so that the main idea comes forth in a few simple sentences. Pulling back all the layers and letting only the simplest idea of the book show through.
Then send it out and have agents tell me: “This feels a little small for a novel.”
But I'm at it again, and here is my first draft of a query for MIND THIEF:
Howie has a problem, someone is stealing his mind and the only one who can help him is a girl who has already lost hers.
After meeting Vivian in the lobby of his psychologist's office, Howie starts experiencing the memories of a man of wealth and taste. First hand memories of some of the evilest acts committed over the past century. He starts investigating and finds historical facts line up with his memories, facts he couldn't know before.
To make things worse, it seems like all his friends are lying to him. He turns to the only one he can trust, Vivian a girl who is clearly a genius and just as clearly pants-crapping insane. With her help he concludes he is either more insane than she is, or the man who controlled the world for the last century has been messing with his life since before he was born.
The only way he can survive is if his love for Vivian is stronger than the evil that has ruled the Earth for the past century.
Mind Thief is my completed 95,000 word (Genre) novel.
Obviously I need a genre and I'm working on narrowing that part down. Other than that, I know query writing is my weakest skill. Any help would be appreciated.